Caution, Poetry In Progress.....

[freydis]

Heart on her sleeve

she muses

a looking glass,

or transparent

You see yourself

or you see everything

Heart on her sleeve

she muses

Wondering at how

she's caught up

in the wind

Heart on her sleeve

she muses

"this isnt me"

she says, riding

in and out on the tide

Its all about control

and she's lost it

carefree

as she muses

with her heart

on her sleeve

[Amerist]

That's an interesting formula, with how the stanza reverses with the very last one. That shift really caught my attention.

Also, I've been curious about something. Where is Hugin?

[freydis]

That's an interesting formula, with how the stanza reverses with the very last one. That shift really caught my attention.

Also, I've been curious about something. Where is Hugin?

Heheheh..... i dunno.....

First person who's recognized that name, i think......

as for the shift, i've seen similar technique used before (mostly ani difranco type stuff), and it seemed to fit here.... I may expand on this a little, and make it a song, not sure yet.