Creative burst

[phee]

How many times can my eyes open?

I escaped the jailer that kept me safe

If even for a moment to taste my dream.

There are other realms of time, space and magic.

All stored here inside this place held in by it.

The forests and the dreams, the violet light from the horizon

A thousand lifetimes lived could not explore what I feel

The mountain tops and beings that dwell forever

The stars so infinite and full of wonder, how did I forget you?

It hurts like a fire of memory that I lost this place.

I cannot control, I want to rest but not to sleep again.

My tears shead with the longing for what is so real and so far away

I open my mouth and go back to me, heart broken and scattard

I just want to fade into my dreams into my dreams into my dreams.

Always just beyond me,

[bean]

I Like it!

[phee]

I Like it!

Thanks...

I was feeling very.... well like that today

[bean]

Thanks...

I was feeling very.... well like that today

I can see that. You explained it well, and creatively.

[taysteewonderbunny]

You ended it with a comma. I was wondering, were you inviting others to add?

(and I like it).

[phee]

You ended it with a comma. I was wondering, were you inviting others to add?

(and I like it).

It just seemed like the way to end it

[taysteewonderbunny]

It just seemed like the way to end it

Well, that is interesting. I have seen poems end in ellipsis, but never in a comma. Nice construction. Mind if I borrow it?

[phee]

Well, that is interesting. I have seen poems end in ellipsis, but never in a comma. Nice construction. Mind if I borrow it?

borrow it? like the poem or the comma?

[Rev.Reverence]

...GREAT STUFF...

...I really dug the last line..

..I imagine the breath in (as denoted by the comma, in a sentence) as te last noise (if it was spoken)...

[phee]

Just one of those days

[taysteewonderbunny]

borrow it? like the poem or the comma?

No, no, no. The comma. If ever I repeat the poem, I will give you full credit for it. I am no plagiarist, sir. A writer myself, I take that MOST SERIOUSLY.

[phee]

yeah... go head

[taysteewonderbunny]

yeah... go head

Aw, thanks!