After Life

[soothsayer]

Wrote this first thing this morning after waking up. It seems to be some cross breed of song lyrics and a poem. I'm not really finished with it but it has potential. I was listening to Danzig last night so I think he inspired these thoughts. That twisted bastard.

Listen to me ~

Hear my words

Hear my voice

Hear my breath

Listen to me ~

Hear my thoughts

Hear my cries

Hear my beating heart

Look at me ~

Look at my face

Look at my lips

Look into my eyes

Look and see ~

Look what I've done

Look where I've been

Look what I've become

Do you like it?

Or does it remind you

Of what I was

Do you fight it?

Do you give in

To your darkest feelings?

Are you pure?

Are you free?

Do you wish it was me?

That brings you alive

In your after life

Did you find what you came to see?

Listen to you ~

Hear your words

Hear your voice

Hear your breath

Listen to you ~

Hear your thoughts

Hear your cries

Hear your beating heart

Look at you ~

Look at your face

Look at your lips

Look into your eyes

Look and see ~

Look what you've done

Look where you've been

Look what you've become

Do you like it?

Or does it remind you

Of what I was

Do you fight it?

Do you give in

To your darkest feelings?

Are you pure?

Are you free?

Do you wish it was me?

That brings you alive

In your after life

Did you find what you came to see?

Do you wish it was me?

That brings you alive

In your after life

Did you find what you came to see?

Do you wish it was me?

That brings you alive

In your after life

[Brenda Starrr]

I felt that one....

[soothsayer]

You felt it? I haven't even began to touch you yet.

Seriously though, is it too twisted, sick or is it just what it is?

[Brenda Starrr]

Why would you ask if I thought it was sick? I can feel the frustration in your words....

[soothsayer]

I ask because others have thought that maybe I was angry when I wrote this or that. Truth is, I can only write lyrics when I'm feeling good. I have to tell those people that, I'm fine thank you. When I am upset I can't be creative to save my life so I just want feedback as to how the lyrics come across. If they seem "angry" then that's good because then I know I can do it without being in the state. Does that make any sense?

[Brenda Starrr]

Of course.

When I write, I write about what I feel or want to feel. I'm never in a specific mood to write. I just do it and hope that it comes out well.

[soothsayer]

In some of your writings I get a sense of urgency, a longing for something/someone if you will.

[Brenda Starrr]

I do seem to write alot about my "urges", don't I? I guess it's because I'm such a sexual person. Whether I'm getting it or not, I seem to want it. If I don't have it, I write about it.

[soothsayer]

I just got to thinking about different song lyrics and song writers and have concluded that, even if you write about a subject that is dark it does not mean your really that type of person. I think it means as a writer you are able to put your thoughts in a place where other people are and write from anothers POV. Strickly for the sake of art/entertainment purposes. Only a few of my lyrics are about a person that I personally know, the rest are just along the lines of fantasy style. A sort of, what if kind of senario.

[FarrIL]

Wow. oo;

That is wonderful, I like it. It seriously reaches out and pulls you in with a vice grip.

[soothsayer]

Thank you both from the bottom of my soul. My bands CD's will be ready for purchase shortly. Just kidding.........or maybe not. :whistling

[Brenda Starrr]

If it happens, I'll buy one.

[soothsayer]

That's what my ultamite goal is. I've done the dirt poor artist thing ~ don't care for it. Now I'd like to try the rich artist thing. The Beatles may have sung "money can't buy me love" but they didn't say it wouldn't bring some happiness.

[tabycat]

woohoo that was great!!!! YOU ROCK!!!! so does DANZIG!!!!

[Brenda Starrr]

FREE BIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIRD!

*lights her Bic

[soothsayer]

My thread got shoved to the bottom. That's like an artists new release getting buried in a flood of other bands getting their product to the market all at the same time. :laughing

[Brenda Starrr]

Awww!

[paradox]

nice work. i love spur of the moment stuff, the things that slip out of the subconcious unedited are usually the best.

i think 'commanding' sums this one up nicely.

[soothsayer]

Thanks Paradox. I didn't see it that way at first but now I can see what you mean.

[Sybil]

Brenda's first response following your "work" was my response.. "i felt that".. my gut shifted, and it wasnt because of the taco bell.. :whistling

[soothsayer]

Did you really think it was that strong? I didn't imagine it would come off like that but maybe that's because I wasn't thnking about anyone when I wrote it. It just came out like a stream of thoughts. Thanks. Hope I didn't bring you down.

[paradox]

it has strong word-choice and has alot of imperatives. im not surprised it evokes that sort of responce.

[soothsayer]

it has strong word-choice and has alot of imperatives.  im not surprised it evokes that sort of responce.

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Uh Oh....... :fear

[paradox]

eh? :blink

[soothsayer]

It's just that I didn't expect for my lyrics to invoke such response. It's not a bad response but the fact that other people get a strong feeling after reading them I can only wonder at this time how they (the lyrics) will come across with music set to them.