In The Darkness

[Brenda Starrr]

In the darkness

I see you standing there

Waiting, watching wondering

If I will see you there

In the darkness

I hear the sounds you make

Breathing, whispering, questioning

If I can hear you at all

In the darkness

I smell your presence here

The scent swirling around me

I wish I could tell what it was

In the darkness

I taste the cool night air

It dances on the tip of my tongue

The sweetness makes me smile

In the darkness

I feel you touch my hair

I can close my eyes and know

That you've been there all along

[Sybil]

:blushing

awww...

very passionate..

[Brenda Starrr]

Thank you, Sybil!

[Guest gothicfaerie]

:tear It makes me miss my exfiance Mark and dead fiance Gary.

Though I'm not sure why.

[Brenda Starrr]

Another oldie.....

[The Rod]

There's a sort of separation of the five senses in this poem, one to each stanza. I'm not sure if you intended that, but I'm guessing you did. Either way, it adds that extra spice and depth to the write. In other words, I liked it very much.

[Brenda Starrr]

There's a sort of separation of the five senses in this poem, one to each stanza.  I'm not sure if you intended that, but I'm guessing you did.  Either way, it adds that extra spice and depth to the write.  In other words, I liked it very much.

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Yes, there was a separation of the five senses. It was completely intentional, as if I was sensing each sense with the person that it was written for.