It's Like

[Brenda Starrr]

My soul aches

My heart is empty

It's cold here now

Like winter

The rooms echo

the wind blows through

It's so dark now

Like night

The sun won't rise

The air won't warm

The rain won't end

Like sadness

[DarkenedCharm]

So beautiful, but so sad, Bren...

[Brenda Starrr]

Shit. I just looked at it, and it doesn't flow.

Goddammit.

[DarkenedCharm]

It flows just fine...No worries at all! The meaning is definitely not lost on me, that's for sure.

[paradox]

thought it was pretty good.

what would you change?

[Brenda Starrr]

It would be more melodic, I guess.

[FarrIL]

I'm actually getting a little choked up reading that. ;_;

[Adriel1]

Very nice bren.

[Lilith]

it looks good to me, you stuff allways looks good.

[Brenda Starrr]

Thank you, Harmony.