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[LostAngel47]

There Was A Mermaid And A Vampire

Chapter One

There once was a mermaid call Gabriela she live on the England Coast Oceans with her friends and Family, She has two brothers and one sister Name Lea Lea and her Brothers are Name Meakco and Seakco, They were the meanest brothers anyone could have . They like to start fights and cause trouble all over the bottom of the ocean everyday they would start a new fight with the other boys. And the other boys would come tell her father. While everyone was dealing with Meakco And Seakco, Gabriela was off doing her adventures exploring under the sea like she does every day, she visits the sinking ships to see what treasure await her like jewels and coins, paintings, She love to explore the ships because they hold a special feeling inside her, She Could not figure out why she had these feels ,She just new it was a good feeling so she would keep do it until one day she came across a old sinking ship. It look like it was falling apart and she wanted to see what was inside, So she went inside to see what was there, at her surprise she came across a coffin, It was seal and inside was a handsome man with pretty black hair when he awoke from his sleep he was charming in some ways and so lonely in others, she gave him a kiss on his cheek and he arose. When he got up out of the coffin and look up at her as she did so, he just smile at her So she asked him his name but he couldn’t talk under the water, so he try to tell her in his mind that he was a prince of darkness she was his new prey. She could talk to him but before She could say anything to him, he was up and trying to get his bearings where he was But for him to understand where he was or anything else, He figure out he was under water. And he need to feed and she was the only one near him so he look in to her eyes and she froze like a statue so he smile at her and said I am sorry but I need your blood and than decided to feast on her neck. And after he was done he waited till night to go above the ocean and back on land with his coffin to fine a place to rest, While she laid there wondering what she had done, who was this creature? In addition, why did he hurt her? And why was she hungry for blood now? She did not understand what he had done to her and this made her very angry she could not go home. She might hurt some one in her family and she did not want to do that. However, the urge of hunger was too strong so she went to the shore where the man live . When she reach the shore it was to late for her to find him, But she had heard that mermaids can turn their tails into legs as long as they were dry and stay out of the water, But by sunset she would have to return to the ocean until the next day. Because they would only stay as legs as long as was sunny and before sunset and dry , But at sunrise she could return to the dry land to seek her creature out and asked him what he had done and why But her first problem of the day was she had been bitten by a vampire and did not know they had to sleep during the day and feed at night, By this time she was so hungry she did not care what she ate ,There were adults at the bar drinking on the beach ,and she new it would have to be someone that no one would miss , All she knew was she had to eat, there are children on the beach playing and they were to small and to much younger than she could ever think of hurting someone that young. But she needed to eat and she new she look old enough to be in a bar so she went over and started to listening what people were saying to each other so she could learn the language so she could speak as well they did, The humans spoke a different language than her. So after while a man came over and asked her if she would like a drink she wasn’t sure how to answer him so she smile and nodded her head no for the drink of alcohol. But what she needed was blood, And she wasn’t sure how to get it, So he asked her if she would like to go somewhere private to talk and get to know each other , So she told him she would love too see his room, so they left the beach area and went to the mans room in the hotel where he was staying. There he turn the lights down low and proceed to try to make out with her and she in turn try to make out with him, But instead her thirst was to strong for her so instead she bit him on the neck and drank his blood she started to feel better but when she realized what she had done the man had fell over uncurious .She was so scared she had know clue what to do so she left the room and went out to find the man who had done this and since mermaids have mortality she could proceed to look for him in the day light, But there was know one to help her, And she needed to find anyone who could help her, And out of the blue came this sweet woman .Karen asked her name and if she needed some help so Gabriela told her what had happen to her and the girl was scared too, But she told her she would help her, Karen asked her, But please don’t bite me ok, Gabriela told her she would not for she was her new friend and she would help her as much as she could to fined the man who did this to her, So they started out to look for him they look everywhere they look around all the bars and pubs and dance halls they could find , Nothing to be found ,so they thought until they came upon a castle it was dark and gloomy and very cold inside it was wet and damp, So they went up She was scared and so very frighten what she might fined, But she had to She had to go nock on the door to find out if he live there so she went to the door and knock and a old man came to the do. He was the butler to this old castle he asked them what they wanted, And than he told them to come in, His master was expecting them, The girls look at each other and proceed to go in to find out who had expected them. He had told them there were clean clothes waiting for them, When they arrive so they were taken to there rooms where they could change there was a beautiful room for Karen and a better one for Gabriella as well. As the girls where ready to meet there host they met in the hallway of the castle and started to proceed down stairs where the butler was waiting for them. The girls look at each other and started to smile for they had know reason to be scared anymore they where dry and out of the cold the fireplace was lit with a roaring fire awaiting for them and hot food for Karen, And blood wine for Gabriella and for himself as well however, There was a problem with Gabriela she had to get back to sea before sunset or she would be turn into suds or spend the rest of her life as a human. On this god forsaken land where she was not from and she just wanted to find out how to stop feeling the way she did about humans and the thirst she felt around them, But the butler had come to see if the girls needed anything and it was minutes away before sunset and Gabriela said yes is the ocean near by he explains yes right below the castle, There is a cave that goes under water into the ocean and lets out in a special cove that will return you to your home and he proceed to ask her why? She says I need to be in the ocean now before sunset so the butler shows her the way to the opening at the bottom of the castle, And Karen awaits for the Vampire to ask him why he did this to her new found friend and how she can be change back, Not thinking he could do the same to her as well. She did not care. Her friend was important to her and that was all that matter to her, while she was waiting for the Vampire, Gabriela was getting back into the ocean and looks at the butler and tells him nothing better happen to her new friend or she would come after him with his own masters teeth if she has too and it did not matter how long it took to do this because her only friend was all she had. Than all of sudden the vampire shows up and looks at her with love and smiles at her, he tells her not to worried about her friend that he would not touch her for he is in love with her Gabriella, So he tells his Butler to go and get a few things to make her more comfortable for her stay in the water to bring things she can use, while he is talking to her, Karen is upstairs starting to go thru things to see what she can find out about her host, and instead runs in other vampires who than attack her and drink her blood until she becomes a vampire as well, her friend Karen is now one of them and before the butler can say anything it was to late for Karen, To late for Gabriela can hear her friend screaming at the top of her lungs for help, Gabriella says why did you do this to me, he replies because you were my only chance to survive, I was so weak and need your blood to live and with out it, I could not of made it and now I can go out into the sunlight where before I could not with out your mermaids immortality quality’s, that is what help me go outside where before I could not, and now I don’t have to wait anymore for the sunset to come out I Thank you for that Gabriela, My Name is William this curse was pass on to me when I was on 18 yrs old . I met a pretty girl one night and she bit me as well, You are now join with me until you die or till I die, I am so sorry about your friend my other house guess thought she was for them I will punish them later for your grief, please forgive me Gabriela, then he went on how he felt about her. I have fallen in love with you, So he tells her to ask and its yours So Gabriela ask him what can I do to stop drinking blood, so he tells her there is know way for her to stop, Oh and guess who stops in to visit but Karen, comes in and she is now a vampire as well, so she decides to tell William that she ready to go out for new blood but he tells her its to early to go, so she sneaks over to Gabriella, And decides to take a bite out of her neck so she can go out in the day time as well. Oh I am so sorry Gabriella, But With out her blood she was a normal vampire and she did not care for that to much .So she ask him again to see if they could go out for blood and leave the castle as well, he told her it was to soon for them to go out, So Karen decides to go on her own leaving everyone looking for her. But than William remembers that he can go out in the day time as well, It is the next day so Gabriela gets out of the ocean to help him find Karen and stop her from being sloppy with her actions as well, But its to late she has attack a woman on the street and can’t stop herself from killing her, and she looks to see what she has done and can’t believe it, herself. That she could kill so easy, and that it’s so messy as well. But than a whistle is blown out loud its a police man who has seen her do this and is calling for back up and for help to stop her, Karen What have you done you are hurting my kind from coming out. You can only attack the homeless and the most needed to keep them off the streets as well. William is telling her she has screw up and she needs to go back to the castle before anyone can see her , Than Gabriela comes along with him and now she is hungry as well so he tries to find them someone to drink from. William has to show them how to pick the prey so they will not be caught, Mean while Gabriela's Father is looking for her and is she in trouble says her brothers. Meakco her older brother is telling his younger brother Seakco that her father is worrying about her, and he finds the blood on the deck of the old sinking ship and knows its hers and calls out to her to see if she answers him but no answer was ever given to him so he thinks she is hurt and makes her brothers go look for her while he looks around the ship for her and can‘t find her either, So he gets more worried about her even more then before so he send his sons out to look for her pass the ocean and on the dry land where they are not aloud to go and so they did and they came to the castle where they seen things that belong to there sister. So they proceeded to get out of the water and find her and ask her where she has been and that there father is looking for her and was worried about her, so they walk up the stairs to see if they could find Gabriela but she was know where to be found, So they look in all the rooms for her, And then they came upon this one room where they heard laughter so they listen too the door and after awhile they decided to go ahead and open it to find five beautiful women in there. Who look so good they had to try, to make a pass at them, and girls like it so much that they had a little fin with them first and tease them till they could not stand it anymore But by there surprise they went for it and the girls bit them but than they heard Gabriela ,And she had no idea that her brothers were there, until she heard them talking down the hall way and could not believe it was them ,They came to her and told them what the women had done to them and she was so mad that she could not think straight and she was so angry she could not think at all. All she wanted was her brothers to be normal again even though that meant they would be mean again, And not like now they were monsters now, They thirst for blood now and they don’t care how they get it or who it’s from either. They weren’t sure what to do about it. The ladies inside the room would laugh because they new what they had to do, so the boys ask them what was so funny and the ladies told them they were now vampires. And there is no cured for there thirst, Later that evening there sister show up and ask what had happen to them, so they told her, she new she had to see her father to explain what had happen to them all,But would she say to him, she love him he was her father and she never wanted to hurt him. So before she left she went out to feed, She knew she had to because other wise she would feed on her father and she did not want to do that. So William took her out to feed later that day they went to a small town out away from the castle and found some people out by the sea shore near the docks, she ask William how to pick some one out for her so he told her he would and to do that you must only drink a little blood from them. Or no more than half there blood. If you drink all, of it, you will kill them and they cannot ever return from the dead, that’s why .I only drank part of yours and that is why you are the way you are now, I am so sorry for what I have done to your family and you Please forgive me .I wish I could make it up to you, since you have made Please forgive me .I wish I could make it up to you, since you have made it possible for me to hunt in the day light where as before I could not Its be seven hundred years since I saw daylight and now. I have you to thankful for it, I hope one day you will forgive me for it, She turns at him and says I for give you But now I have to ask for forgiveness from my father who now has only one child left because of me, and I know he will not forgive me. My brothers are now Vampires as well as I am how do I change that, only if they do not feed, He tells her ,she says what do you mean if they are not bitten again with in two days they will return but for you I am afraid its to late you, Because you have already eaten three times so you can not, So how do we stop them from eating William says I can lock them up in the dungeon for two days in a cage under water so they will stay as they were before they met the girls, she springs up with happiness and tells him. Oh yes Please let us do that and I will go and speak to my father about what happened. So she new what she had to do to see her father to explain what had happen to all of them. But what would she say to him she love her father and never wanted to hurt him so before she left she went out later that day with William to feed, William took her out they went to a small town out away from the castle and found some people out by the sea shore near the ocean, She ask William how do you pick some one out. Her thoughts were strong on how to learn to feed herself and to do as well as William, They turn around and there wear homeless people all around them, Well she asked him ,He tries to remind her again before she can say anything to him, He says only if you drink half there blood. If you drink all, of it, you will kill them and they cannot ever return from the dead, That’s why I only drank part of yours and that is why you are the way you are now, I am so sorry for what I have done to your family and you. Please let not think about it any more ok she tells him and I will go and speak to my father about what happen so after awhile she decides to talk to her brothers and make them think there were all going out to eat with there little sister but instead it was a trap, Her and William came up with to put them in the cage, One of Williams girls name Lisa decides to play along to help out there master. And it works the boys went for it except they thought she was the pure bread human to feed on they did not realize she was a vampire too, So they were playing a game with her until they could get her in the cage with them, and it work except she got out the other side where her master was holding the door open for her. Gabriella was please to see they were safe but how will you get them into the ocean she said the cage is on a crane where it can be lifted up and over to the ocean but there many rooms under the castle that know one really knows about but William and he has pick out a good room for them so if they get out of there cage they will be stuck in the room anyways because it is under water and there is no way out but thru the door is a room below where they will stay until they return the way they were. You will hear the cries for a while but it is only to keep them at bay from feasting on anything living, it’s to help you and give you time to find your father and to explain what has happen ok. But I wish I could take back what I had done to you but since I can not would you be my wife he ask her and she told him she would answer when she got back with her father . So she kiss William good by and went off her way back to the under water cave where she could find the cove to return home and to find the castle . But she need to leave fast, Because her brothers cries were so bad she could not stand it any more herself And To where she could find out where her father had already been and to go there where she hope to find him but he was not it was to late he was already gone and left to look for his children not realizing what he might find looking for them, She try to make it back to Williams castle before her father did, And that he might not get bitten before she got there but he wasn’t there yet and she got worried about him, so she told William she could tell him what had happen to all of them because he was know where to be found and she knew he was looking for them, but it was to late again her father had been bitten as well now what was she suppose to do her father was smarter than her brothers, So how was she suppose to trap him. She need a plan and she need it quickly so William knew someone who could help them, To track her father down, and hopefully before he decides to feed as well, Karen was still in the castle and waiting for everyone to return, it seem like it was for ever but she waited because her friend had ask her too, And she did not want to disappoint her knew friend since she had know others. But she was board so she went to the other rooms where the other girls were and would start asking questions about what they did around there for fun except they could not go out in the day light like everyone else could they were bit by the old vampire where she was not, nor was Gabriella. Gabriella was a mermaid as well, it made it easy for them to go out in the day light only they were jealous about there powers weren't that strong as Gabriella’s and Karen. They wish they had the powers so they could do more things besides staying inside until dark, But they did what there master told them to do. They were To stay there and watch for the father in case he show up but not to bite him but keep him from getting his sons out of there cage until they change back so they won't hurt anyone, and stay as they are as well. So as they waited to see what would happen next they made a game up to keep the brothers occupies, so they would not think how hungry they were, But the brothers were so hungry that nothing could keep there minds off of food, And the women try so hard to help them. Their father was out there somewhere looking for them, but he was bitten as well by a friend of Williams, So now they had a bigger problem to worried about now, how to find her father and stop him from eating, so they went to Williams friends and asked him where he could find the father of Gabriella and her brothers. So the man said you could find him on the back road to London where he is lying on the ground where I left him he should still be there why is he special or something, William told him he was a good friend of his family, so the man show him where he left Gabriella’s father, So they went to the place where he was, there lies her father on the ground, William told her they had to hurry because her father will turn into a vampire while he was still out to Willaim cold so they took him tWilliams place up to the castle, where they could watch all of them together, But her father needed to be put some where so her brothers don’t bite him again or he would stay as a vampire as well so her brothers and her father were separated as well. She just knew she was happy to have most of all of her family back together again, except for her little sister who was safe at home and that made her smile, even though the hard part has not come yet, When she realized what her family had to endure pain a lot of it she could not stand it at all and for that she new they had to get back to normal But she had to leave she could not stand the screams the louder they got the more she listen to them the more she wanted to let them go but she knew she could not, Because her little sister Lea Lea needed her father and in time her family would forgive her and she knows that it will be hard for them to understand that she can never go back For she has eaten more than four times already before she found out how to change back to being a mermaid again, but now she can fly like the birds and she had wings as well she learn to fly with William as well so he had to learn as well how to swim again with a tail, it was hard at first but he got the hang of it after all. But he still bump into things on some things, William can swim like a merman it meant a lot for him as well because he was the cause of it all, So he hopes to make it up by marring her, so while they were waiting, Gabriella had to leave for two days she could not stand seeing here family in so much pain, so she told William that she would return in that time and to please take care of her family, and that she would answer him when she got back. So she ask her friend if she would like to join her on a trip across the land, Karen told her that would be great but where to go and how far because they had never been anywhere so they took a map out, and closed there eyes and just pick, the map said the name of the town, And it was called Bristol, So the girls decided to go there it wasn’t far from them and they could fly and be back in time to see her family after they change back into mermen’s, so they took off and went to Bristol and went and had fun But know matter what Gabriella did she could not stop worrying about her family and William as well when the father came to his senses, He started to ask question like where his daughter was and why were they locked up in a dungeon for two days, But before William could answers Gabriella and Karen had just return to the castle to see how things were? Since she could not stand for the screaming .She had to leave but now she is back and now she had to explain the whole thing to her father, he was upset that William did this to his baby girl she was his child and she was his favorite child. She was the oldest daughter but never the least his daughter, he was so angry he went after William and Gabriella had to stop him before he realize he was hurting the only man she would ever be able to live with and spend the rest of her life with him, Her father and his sons had to get back into the ocean before they would change in another way like suds or human, which was not a good thing to do. So Gabriella show them the way to the entrance of cave that would lead them home to the under water castle, so her father told her he would be back in the morning, he had circumstances to talk with his family about what they could do for Gabriella ,And she knew there was nothing anyone could do for her except, William and he was the only one that could. Because for her. she could not return to them and live under the ocean now since she was a vampire and a mermaid. It was hard for her to figure out where to live, Than she remember William ask a question before she left on her trip to find her father, so she went to him and ask him if he was sincere about the question or not that he told her it was from his cold heart since that was all he had since he was not alive, But in reality he was really dead to his family except his brother he see only on certain times of the year and had know one to share his life with as he new it now so he ask her again will you marry me she look at him and said yes, But we need to tell my father as well, because he hates you so much right now and I don’t think he will like this but it is better then to be alone the rest of my life, So while they were talking about there future, Her father and brothers went home to see Lea Lea who was home alone and scare something happen badly to her family there was know word on how they were doing so she waited for them to come home and find out what happen to there sister as well, when they got there she had lock the doors so they could not come in and her father told her it was ok that they were all better now and that she could ask them anything to help her be convinced they were ok. An that they were not vampires either so she could feel safe from them they were her family and something happen to them and she knows it was bad and she was scare to see if they were the same as her sister as well, even though she love her sister she had heard the stories being told of her big sister and was told her brothers and father were as well she did not know they could be change back the way they were either she had to ask for her safety as well as her family to make sure they were ok . Second chapter, So she tested them on things like what do you love to eat he told her it was Fish of the sea especially sword fish, Then she asked them what was there favorite color who was there favorite girl under the sea, so she let him in the house, and she decided to ask what had happened to all of them the brothers were not so please to answer her questions since they fell for the tricks the girls play on them, And than again when they were caught by another playing to be like she was human and innocence but play her part very well ,She ask her father where was her sister why did she not come with them,

[Homicidalheathen]

You need to watch run on sentences.....and I noticed a few grammer errors......but I loved the story line.

[torn asunder]

honestly, you won't get many people (including me) to read something that has not one single line break in it. it just presents as overwhelming, and many people won't bother....

could you break it up into some paragraphs? you might get more input!

[LostAngel47]

i would love to but i am not sure how to break it up to smaller paragraphs

[torn asunder]

you'll never write a book if you don't understand basic grammar & punctuation (which includes paragraph breaks) - maybe you could take some classes to help you towards your goals!?